Subject: Furaibou Balmung Mon Nov 25, 2013 6:31 pm
Name: Furaibou Balmung
Age: 13
Gender: Male
Background: A young lad who used to help his family with blacksmithing in his hometown. After being kidnapped by a group of bandits when he was 10 and taken away from his village, he ended up prisoner in their headquarters, on Kirigakure's outskirts. Using a thorn apart katana he had brought with him, he could cut the ropes being used for holding him in and make his way out, by using what he knew of swordmanship and chakra usage to escape from the few guards trying to keep him in his cell. Currently living in a small apartment in Kirigakure, he trains to become a force to be reckoned with, aiming to create weapons strong enough to hurt divine beings.
Appearance:
Always wears an olive-colored incomplete set of samurai armor (Turns red after activating Kekkei Genkai). Always carries both of his swords the whole time, plus a pair of small hammers.
Regular:
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With Kekkei Genkai activated (WIP):
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Personality: Tries to be bold, but it doesn't change the fact he's a coward on the inside. Enjoys helping people with small favors, but dislikes abuses. Tries to respect everyone, deeming that as being "likely of a noble warrior".
Specialization (Taijutsu, Ninjutsu, Genjutsu)
Majour: Taijutsu (Bukijutsu)
Minour: Ninjutsu
-Chakra Style: Earth Style
Village of Allegiance: Kirigakure
Clan: Balmung (WIP)
Weapons:
Gotterdammerung:
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An Odachi given to Furaibou by the owner of the blacksmith shop next to his appartment a few months after he moved into Kirigakure, as a reward for helping him with the shop while he's not there and needs someone to keep an eye on things. Even with a 208cm blade, it still handles nicely due to a technique the shop owner used on it to be able to make it lighter and twice as resistant by using chakra. Being the first act of kindness towards Furaibou, he treasures it with care, willing to risk his life to avoid losing it.
Niohoggr and Jormungandr:
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A pair of blades, 156cm long. Niohoggr is shaped like a pincer, and Jormungandr, like a cleaver. Backstory is WIP.
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Subject: Re: Furaibou Balmung Tue Nov 26, 2013 7:21 am
You will be ranked Genin. Watch your grammar, as there were some flaws that stood out in your spelling. Your punctuation wasn't bad, but it wasn't necessarily good either. Try to work on the flow and articulation of every sentence and phrase so that it doesn't sound to categorized and simple. I suggest working on finding a writing style that suits your personality, and try to break away from just trying to "write good". On Thursday or Friday, if you feel as though you have advanced to the levels above your current standings, Declare for Chunin. Overall, very good app!
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